Writing 1
Describing hometown
Procces 4
Pariaman is a great city in West Sumatera which has a large area and interesting place to visit for the tourist.
Pariaman is located in west coast of Sumatera Island and face to Hindia Ocean, it is a beautiful city and also a big area. The width of pariaman is around 66,13km² and almost of Pariaman area use to rice field areal.
Pariaman is also famous tourism place, the tourism place in Pariaman you can find is beach, such as Gandoriah, Arta and Cermin beach but the famous beach is Gandoriah beach because the train from padang to pariaman always stop in this place, that is why many people visit this place.
from:http://www.google.co.id/imglanding?q=pantai%20gandoriah&imgurl
The weather in pariaman is hot during the day because it is located in the lowland and surrounded by the sea but in the night is cool enough because the wind blow all night and it makes the weather become cool.
People from out of town usually visit Pariaman to taste the traditional food because Pariaman has many delicious traditional foods such as "sala lauak" and "gulai kapalo lauak" and you can find it in all pariaman traditional restaurant like Pauh Restaurant in Nagari Pauh.
There is not enough public car transportation in Pariaman, so if you want to go to the village near the central city of pariaman, you have to use “ojek” or rent motorcycle but it is better to bring your own vehicle.
My hometown is very nice and fun place, with many places to visit and much delicious food. So, just come to pariaman that you can prove it with your self and you will never disappointed.

you have a good idea...
ReplyDeletebut you sentences in paragraph 3,4,5, and 6, it just have one sentence.
try to put some dot in your sentences.
don't make your sentences to very long.
Good essay,...
ReplyDeleteWait,..
I want to ask you something,.
How many paragraph that have you written??
I suggest you to give some spaces in a first sentence of each paragraph.
That's all from me,.
:)
i think your paragraph is good enough,
ReplyDeletebut it better to you to give space from each paragraph,,
it is like just 1 idea in your paragraph,,
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but, so far, you have told more information about your hometown, Sabil...
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i think your essay is good enough...
ReplyDeletebut you still hve mistakes in sentence structure and dictions..
so, i think you still need to revise it and still need improvement..
you have a good essay..
ReplyDeletebut i think
-in the third paragraph so many "coma"
-if you write "such as" do not use "coma"
-do not began paragraph with conjunction "so"
this good essay,,,
ReplyDeleteand this essay can make improved my knowladge!
thanks a lot.
i think you essay good..
ReplyDeletei'm interesting..
but ..
you should constraint between paragraf 1 and 2,..and other..
i think that all..
keep spirit..
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ReplyDeletei like tour essay,,
but,
please notice the structure of your paragraph..
you should give space.
it make the reader easy to read..
just it..
keep writing to be better...^_^
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ReplyDeletehey sabil....
your essay background same with me...
are you cheating me......???
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I can not stop laughing...
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your essay is good, but is better to you if you give more picture about your hometown.
ReplyDeletein paragraph 3 "famous beach is Gandoriah beach because the train from padang to pariaman always stop in this place, that is why many people visit this place."
maybe you can give more information about Gandoriah beach
hihihi
sabil,
ReplyDeleteso far so good .
But, every paragraph has too few sentences .
OK,
I think that's all from me .
It's clear everybody :p